diff --git a/other-docs/guides/upgrading/v16.md b/other-docs/guides/upgrading/v16.md
index 7b430571..d1273a44 100644
--- a/other-docs/guides/upgrading/v16.md
+++ b/other-docs/guides/upgrading/v16.md
@@ -41,8 +41,8 @@ composer server cli -- altis migrate
 
 Altis v16 continues our experimental support for PHP 8.2 in both local and cloud environments. We have improved
 compatability with PHP 8.2 (and 8.1) but there are a number
-of [backward incompatible changes](https://www.php.net/manual/en/migration82.incompatible.php) in PHP 8.2 which should
-be taken into consideration and addressed.
+of [backward incompatible changes](https://www.php.net/manual/en/migration82.incompatible.php) in PHP 8.2 which you
+should take into consideration.
 
 Refer to our [PHP Version Guide](docs://guides/updating-php/) for up-to-date compatibility, testing and upgrading
 information.
@@ -61,10 +61,10 @@ To activate Afterburner on your environment, [create a support ticket](support:/
 
 ### Altis Core improvements
 
-We have incorporated over twenty-five updates to modules and libraries in Altis, bringing in important bug fixes and
-improvements. This includes the WordPress CMS which has been updated to version 6.2.2.
+We made over twenty-five updates to modules and libraries in Altis to bring in important bug fixes and improvements.
+This includes the WordPress CMS, which we updated to version 6.2.2.
 
 ### Documentation
 
-We have improved our developer focussed documentation again. As usual, feedback from our customers and partners is
-always welcome. Please [send us any feedback you have](mailto://support@altis-dxp.com).
+Our developer focussed documentation has been improved again. As usual, feedback from our
+customers and partners is always welcome. Please [send us any feedback you have](mailto://support@altis-dxp.com).